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Todd McGee
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I made a lot of suggestions for tightening your prose. Because this is the first chapter, you want to pull the reader in right away, but it seems like you included a lot of unnecessary backstory and internal thoughts. The pacing seemed a little slow, but that just may be me.

 

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