Here is a reformatted version of Connie’s Ch. 3. I was going to do it for myself anyway to make it easier to read and figured I post it for anyone else who plans to do a critique.
Connie, it appears you might be using line breaks, rather that creating new paragraphs when you write. I don’t know if this is something that happens when you paste it into the forum, or if it’s something you are doing when you write in your word processor (Word?). It is a little bit of a problem though, as it affects readability and every single line of text needs to be adjusted.