One thing I noticed about this scene is the great opening line. Wow.
You did a great job with color-coding the scene. Just curious, did you have any revelations with your own work from writing out Tessa’s scene and/or color coding?
Here is my color coded Tessa Dare scene. Other than dialogue, which is sparse, I think there’s a good balance of the other four modes. As far as pacing, there is a good balance between text and white space The color coding was interesting. I noticed there aren’t any big chunks of action. Instead, it is interspersed with emotion, exposition and description. I was also surprised to see how much exposition there actually was, particularly near the end of the scene.