Reply To: Lessons 5 and 6

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Anonymous

    HI Pam,
    I agree with you. I wanted a little more from the scene–either in dialogue or emotion. But, like you pointed out, it is a short scene, which doesn’t leave a lot of room for either. Good insights. Thanks.
    Also, I have the scene you wrote. I’ll be posting my response to Ana tomorrow and then probably your response on Tuesday. Is it okay if I share my feedback with everyone or would you prefer that I just send it to you? Totally your choice. Just wanted to check.
    Regards,
    Jen

    I thought it could use a bit more dialogue and emotion, although the exposition and action flowed well. Although it was short I thought it was well-paced and not too clunky.

    Pam

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    I thought it could use a bit more dialogue and emotion, although the exposition and action flowed well. Although it was short I thought it was well-paced and not too clunky.

    Pam

    • This reply was modified 1 year, 9 months ago by .