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  • in reply to: MARCH BOD meeting Wednesday, 3,2021 #47474
    Ana Morgan
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    The Critique Loop is ticking along. A former member rejoined. All is well.

    Respectfully submitted,

    Ana Morgan, Crit loop moderator

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #47445
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    This reads well, Todd. I made a few more suggestions.

    RWA did assign a lot of entries. I read two short ones right away, then set a goal of one long book a week.

    Ana

    in reply to: Week 7 Check-in #47431
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Ah, I used to be a So-Cal girl. (I miss picking avocados, oranges and lemons off the trees in  my parents’ yard.)

    I’d love to join in the sprints. Unfortunately, my best, most reliable to be uninterrupted time is 5 – 7 am Central time M-F. The rest of my day is subject to the ever-changing demands of one day job (two in the summer). I steal time to write at work when I can, but if the phone rings, and an order comes in, I am duty bound to stop writing.

    Ana

    in reply to: Week 7 Check-in #47420
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Ana, here.  I hope all those who faced horrible weather are doing okay. We endured 10 days of subzero days and -20 to -30 degree nights. Life had to go on–work, cow chores–but other than that, we hunkered down and stayed reasonably warm. I was stuck on my WIP (Mercury retrograde in Aquarius was not a creative muse for me) but it’s over now and voila! Yesterday, I was able to flesh out my opening chapter with deep POV. Forward ho to my half-written chapter 2.

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #47371
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thanks, Jen! I agree about needing to show more of Shane’s personality. I’m glad his childhood issues resonated with you. He will reveal details after he meets the heroine and her father.

    Ana

    in reply to: Zara West Submissions #47358
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    The information in this chapter is thorough and extensive, IMO, Zara. Definitely a good resource, especially the links.

    Ana

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #47335
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Some suggestions, Mark. I like how you are showing their respective feelings!

    Ana

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #47266
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Todd, I used a 3rd POV–the villain’s– in a published romance. I felt it upped the tension–and my editor agreed. (Nora Roberts does this, so I felt safe to try, too.)

    Ana

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #47257
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Here’s my feedback, Todd. The politics are completely believable. I think Milly’s feelings for Mark need more development in previous chapter for Katie to be able to come out and press Milly like she does here.

    Ana

    in reply to: Lisa Warren #47197
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Good for Jake for standing up to the hanker! Penn’s appearance ties up a loose end. You could expand on Jake’s jealousy and add tension to the will their love survive?

    Ana

     

    in reply to: Zara West Submissions #47195
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    I really like how you started out with the comparison to archaeology, Zara. Very apt.

    Your Research checklist is great!

    Ana

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #47184
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thank you, Lisa! In addition to using the character development and first chapter info I gleaned from Linnea Sinclair workshops, with this story I am following the Pretty Woman story structure featured in our chapter’s January webinar: introduce hero, introduce heroine, then throw them together.

    Ana

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #47178
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thank you for your critique, Zara! I should have included a story overview. This is a romance.

    Scarred at age ten, when a near-fatal fire triggered his wealthy parents to divorce, Shane Kendrick is determined to learn every practical skill possible and prove he doesn’t need their money or connections to succeed. He hates how powerful people dictate to “little” people while claiming what they are doing is based on love. He will meet his love interest in the next town.

    Terra Green is haunted by the guilt of causing the accident that killed her mother when she was four. She runs the greenhouse-nursery business started by her father and is smotheringly protective because he suffers from macular degeneration.

    Shane will help her to see that her dad is happier when allowed to do things she feels are too dangerous. That she can’t protect her father from everything. That she can let go and let others help.

    She will help him rediscover the value of family through her close relationship with her dad, show him that love is complicated and can exist despite there being some strings attached. That the strings are actually bonds, not chains.

    Ana

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #47125
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thank you for the feedback, Jessica!

    Ana

     

    in reply to: FEB 2021 CHAPTER MINUTES #47117
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    I second.

    Ana Morgan

    in reply to: REMINDER, FEBRUARY BOD meeting. 2/3/21 WEDNESDAY! #47091
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Two new members joined the Critique group in January. The loop is running harmoniously, with helpful critiques exchanged.

    Respectfully submitted,

    Ana Morgan  loop moderator

    in reply to: Lisa Warren #46996
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    I try to get up by 5 am. Most days, it’s my only chance to write. Critiques are important, too.

    Ana

     

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #46988
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thank you, Vicki! I make the changes you suggested.

    Ana

    in reply to: Lisa Warren #46986
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Exciting chapter, Lisa. Lots of mob action.

    Ana

    in reply to: Jen Melland submissions folder #46949
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Hey everyone, Jen is back!

    In 2019, she had that great story about the woman trying to save the campground and Finn, the ranger who was supposed to stop her from saving it from being sold off.

    She’s looking primarily for story development feedback and bouncing ideas.

     

    Ana

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #46943
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thank you for the feedback, Lisa!

    Last summer I took a Linnea Sinclair class on first chapters using Trust Me, and though it was really hard (she’s tough!),  it gave me a better foundation on how to open a story.

    Ana

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #46936
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    I like this, Todd. I noted a few questions….

    Ana

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #46925
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Thanks, Todd! Very helpful feedback.

    Ana

    in reply to: Ana Morgan submissions #46920
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    After deciding I need to let Trust Me stew, I started a new story. A contemporary.

    Ch 1 introduces the hero, Shane Kendrick. Does it show well enough his motivation and inner fear of getting trapped into his divorced parents’ games?

    Ana

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #46868
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Followup thought, Todd. I don’t know if this chapter is complete, but I’m thinking you might want to advance the plot or heighten the tension by having Mark and Milly interact (spar) more. He chokes through her presence but there’s no repercussion for him emotionally. No reaction from her other than to be Milly-nice and go back to Tim. Ana

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #46859
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Great chapter, Todd. I liked the humor. Vivid descriptions.

    Ana

     

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    in reply to: Lisa Warren #46798
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Sex scenes are the hardest to write, IMO. The best advice I have heard is to focus on the emotions, not on the body parts.

    Ana

     

    in reply to: Todd McGee submissions #46787
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Todd, here in rural MN, the pageants are named for towns  (Park Rapids, Menahga, Wadena, Sebeka, Perham, New York Mills). Each town has at least one summer festival (in non covid times.)  Girls who live outside of town can participate based on where they attend school -or if homeschooled, where their mail delivery originates.

    Miss Menahga and her court (varying age groups) ride on floats in parades.

    So if Pennsylvania is like MN, she would be Miss Beaver Falls.

    Ana

     

    in reply to: Vicki Briner Submissions #46757
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    I think your ch 1 insert is great, Vicki.

    So is this ending chapter. You’ve left open the reason for a book 2 story, yet closed this one out nicely.

    Ana

    in reply to: January 2021 CHAIN EVENT #46722
    Ana Morgan
    Participant

    Whoo hoo! I made up (in my mind) for last week. 4 hours yesterday, 4 hours today. I outlined my new WIP.

    Ana

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