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Attached are the minutes from our February BOD meeting. Please let me know if I need to make any modifications.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Ana! I’m still working through some chapters from Trust Me that I’ll post soon. But I wanted to get up to date on your new work. My husband’s name is Shane so I’m already fond of the hero. 🙂
Use what you find useful.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryWelcome Lisa! You’ll love this group! I’m a huge fan of hockey and hockey romance. Living in the Tampa Bay area, the best thing of 2020 was the Lightning winning the Stanley Cup. Wear my Stanley Cup mask everywhere I go! 🙂 Look forward to reading your work.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryStory complete! Great work, Vicki. Loved this journey. Made a few comments on this final chapter. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Vicki, Attached is Chapter 43-44. I made some comments surrounding POV. Take what you want and ignore the rest. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHere is the January BOD minutes and the December chapter meeting minutes. Please let me know if there are any corrections needed.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Vicki, Great three little chapters. Added some thoughts and suggestions. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Vicki, I posted in my own thread an apology to all of you for being completely MIA in December. My son ended up testing positive for COVID after a soccer tournament and then I also came down with it. We had relatively mild symptoms compared to all the stories we hear so we are grateful, but it really through us off our schedule for the holidays and I was so behind that some of my writing stuff fell by the wayside because I had a release to launch and some FTHRW obligations. It may take me a bit to get back on track. 🙂
Enjoyed this chapter. I missed Eric and Elise. 🙂 I did comment in the end about Elise’s motivation to do something so silly as to leave her brothers and go to her house. I think you need to ramp up her motivation. See my comment on the end. Otherwise, loved getting back into the story.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryGood Evening All! Just wanted to apologize for being MIA in December. My son had tested positive for COVID in early December after a soccer tournament and a few days later so did I. Luckily my husband and my two daughters were spared and my son and I had mild symptoms compared to many. But it did sort of knock me down for a few days and with the holidays around the corner, I had a lot of catching up to do – including coordinating one of the categories for the PFTH contest. Anyway, I’m back! 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHere are the minutes from the 12/3 BOD meeting. Please let me know if you see any glaring errors. 🙂
Happy New Year!
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryAha! It was on the first page and completely separate of the rest of the meeting. I believe I got it.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryShirley, Attached are the October 2020 chapter minutes. Please let me know if you need any changes.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryAttached is the BOD minutes from our November meeting. Please let me know if there are any changes needed. 🙂 Hope you all had a lovely Thanksgiving.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Ana, A few comments on these chapters. Use what is helpful. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryMorning Vicki, Love the homecoming. I read through the entire chapter and commented on a few things, but I went back to the beginning and added a comment. The first part of the chapter when they meet Elise’s brothers is in Eric’s POV. I almost think the chapter would be stronger all in Elise’s. You could ramp up the emotions – this is a big deal for her. She’s missed her brothers but is upset with them for hiding all of this. She’s just had a harrowing experience of being kidnapped by a rival family and finding out she was a member of a powerful mob family and that her mother may be alive. Just my two cents. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryI’m so sorry, Ana. Not sure what happened there. Let me know if this one works.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryLoving this story, Ana. Found a few spots to add more of a visceral reaction from the characters to pull the reader even deeper into the scene and story. I’m enjoying Galen’s slight flirting. It’s fun. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryMorning Vicki! Enjoyed these chapters. Have some comments. Use what you think is helpful.
By the way, I love the new profile picture 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Vicki, I’ve read over Chapter 34. Use what is useful. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryLove how this story is moving along. Use what you find useful, Ana!
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHi Ana! Great chapters. A few comments on Ammi’s POV and bringing a little deeper. Between her father’s injuries and her desire to be a foster mom, I think you can go a little deeper into her POV in a few scenes to bring her more fully on the page. Otherwise, I love the chapters. 🙂 Use what you find useful.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryHere is the Secretary’s Report from the October BOD meeting. Please let me know if there are any changes needed.
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryThank you, Vicki and Ana! I appreciate your thoughts and suggestions. I’m horrible at blurb writing. I need to take a course on that like you did, Vicki. 🙂
Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW SecretaryWorking on my blurb for Haven. Would love everyone’s thoughts. I always struggle with these.
<p style=”margin: 0in; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 11.0pt;”>Mia Goran lives her life exactly how everyone expects. She works at a large law firm negotiating commercial real estate transactions and corporate contracts. She’s engaged to a handsome man bearing the same Serbian heritage as her father. She’s surrounded by a wonderful family and great friends. So, why is she so restless?</p>
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<p style=”margin: 0in; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 11.0pt;”>When her fiancé makes a big mistake, she takes off to Hawaii to escape reality and figure out what she wants to do with her life. Little does she know that her journey will change her life forever.</p>
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<p style=”margin: 0in; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 11.0pt;”>Kekoa Hale was born and bred on the Big Island. He’s no stranger to heartbreak. After his father dies, he’s forced to sacrifice part of his career and the thing he loves most – surfing – to help his mother and brother run their coffee farm and inn. So when his fiancé leaves him for a mainlander, he builds a wall around his heart and shuts out all feelings. That is until he crosses paths with a beautiful stranger staying at his family’s inn.</p>Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
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