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Here’s chapter 3 also. They’re both pretty short. No rush, but if I don’t post them today, I’m not sure when I’ll be able to.
I enjoyed reading this and love Christmas stories. Can’t wait to read more. Here are my notes.
Love these chapters, Jenn. I’m finally feeling caught up after jumping in midway and love the story so much. Here are my notes. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1f8jlDGPB1ba3g370VXjN-rxOSKdK3rZaKw3mFmQQdG4/edit?usp=sharing
I’m “hooked,” Zara!
Here are my notes. Just a few punctuation misses.
That’s great news! I’ll post a link next time.
Here is Chapter 2 of ONE ROYAL NIGHT.
I’m going to start putting this royal romance novel on Radish and Wattpad after making your fantastic suggested edits. What do you think about this book title, ONE ROYAL NIGHT and the linked bookcover? Do I need a tagline? Any suggestions?
Very helpful comments! I’m reading through them now and they’re very helpful.
I appreciate your comments. Thanks for reading. Your comments are spot-on.
Just digging into your comments here and I greatly appreciate them. I feel like a better writer already.
See if this works. Let me know and if not, I will just send notes as a reply here or an email to you.
Let’s try this route. They’ll be footnotes instead. I don’t have MS Word. I use Google Docs, so I hope this works.
Yes there should be a comments section in the top right corner of the document. Click on that and the comments should pop up.
I’m a little behind on my Ragged Cove sweet romance so I wanted to share my high heat romance meant for Radish Fiction. I’m open to any and all comments.
I’m on my phone so I’m sorry about the link. Let me know if you have trouble accessing the comments. Excellent chapter. Everything moved so quickly. Can’t wait to read what happens next.
I’m on my phone so I’m sorry for the link instead of a Word Doc. Let me know if you can’t access my comments for some reason. Excellent chapters as always. I’m looking forward to reading more.
Thanks, Zara! This is much more concise than what I’ve been using. I’m attaching one of my resources because the link to the article called “The Math” has really helped me break down writing a novel into bite-sized chunks. This is assuming 2,000 words, which is short but can be modified. My scenes aren’t nearly as helpful as what you posted, though, so I’m printing it out now. Thank you.
I am nearly finished with revisions on the first chapter. I wanted to thank each of you for your notes. I appreciated the thorough nature of each one. Your suggestions really helped me think through my language choices. I am already so proud of this chapter. Thank you all!
Questions for this rewrite: Does Sam’s firing seem more plausible? Does her anticipation of the proposal seem clear?
Ch. 1 Rewrite – Arranged with Love
Thank you for that message. I have been hesitant to critique as I go, but it’s one of the few things that keeps me “unstuck” and moving forward on a project. You’re right, though. It’s very easy to feel like a whole chapter should be tossed, but sometimes a line or two can fix it. Everyone’s notes were extremely helpful and helped me brainstorm on how to fix the chapter. I wanted a few days to pass before making a decision, so today I’m going to spend time revising it.
No worries about Chapter 2. When you have time, it’s fine.
I do! They’re a handful, but they’re also a lot of fun.
Thank you everyone for your notes. I agree that Sam’s firing needs work. I wonder if I should just ditch that storyline and start with building from this chapter? Sure, it’ll go in another direction, but this was my first draft. I felt it was truer to her character, but it also doesn’t have any action and it isn’t fleshed out well.
I also felt the disadvantage to this alternative chapter is it starts too slow and then I feared her story would be too saggy in the middle. It might also be too sad with one parent gone and another growing older.
My question is should I toss the Sam getting fired chapter and build on this alternative one? Or should I build on Sam’s firing and reshape it so it works and is stronger? I felt her getting fired would bring the reader into the action and would be a strong hook. It could then allow me to bring her boyfriend back in as a villain later.
Jenn, I’m going to post this alternative chapter for everyone, but will attach it here. Should I completely toss out Sam’s firing and work with this chapter (which also needs some work)? I’m in the first draft of this story first, so that’s why it’s so shaky.
I’m not sure if you need anymore comments, but I made a few. I loved reading this. Fantastic work. Can’t wait to read more.
Great chapters, Jenn. Just a few notes, but mostly I enjoyed reading these.
Here’s a link to the Google Doc file with my notes in the comments. Let me know if you prefer notes another way.
Here is my crit of your two chapters. I love how you wrote Cole. I am not sure about Sam. The reason she’s fired seems shaky.
Thanks, Ana. I can see it being shaky. I had more development there and edited it out.
I have two chapters I would like to get a critique on, mostly for big picture edits. Are there any major areas of concern? Lingering questions? Etc.