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Thanks Jenn, Great feedback and suggestions. Glad you are enjoying the story. One chapter to go. Zara
Thank you so much for the great catches, Ana.
Here is Chapter 3 from my Carpenter Christmas story. All feedback welcome.
Here is my feedback, Jen. Lots to like in these two chapters.
here arte thoughts, Connie. Use what is helpful. Zara
Thank you for those catches. Much appreciated. Zara
Here are my thoughts. Use what is helpful as always.
Thank you so much, Jenn. Very helpful feedback.
Thanks, Ana. Your feedback is always so helpful. Much appreciated. Zara
I am trying to write a sweet Christmas short story. Here is the beginning. Any thoughts? Comments? All feedback welcome.
Thank you Jenn for all the great suggestions for this and the previous chapters. I am busying making all those changes. Working on edits from my publishers so all catches at this point are powerfully helpful.
Here is my feedback. Use what is helpful. Zara
here is my feedback. Use what is helpful. Also thank you for your crit of my Chapter 30.
Here is chapter 30. All feedback appreciated. Zara
Here is some feedback. Zara
Hi Zara, here’s my crit of chapter 29.
Thanks for all the great catches. Made those changes. Zara
Here is my take on Chapter 9. As far as I know the speech was pretty much the same as now in the late 1880s so consider maybe having her wearing an old-fashion hairstyle instead. Also consider writing this in past tense. I am not sure present works for your story. See my comment at the end.
I definitely moved that paragraph in Chapter 28. Thanks for the feedback. Here is chapter 29. The story continues.Hi all, My name is Zara West. My NaNoWriMo handle is Zara West Suspense.My email I am using is email@example.com.Super writing, everyone! Zara
I’m excited for the ending!
Thanks so much, Jenn. Great catches. I love the idea at the end of showing the kittens at his house earlier. Have a good idea about where to insert that. Zara
Perfect timing, Zara. I’d just sat down at work to work on my next chapter. And your sub popped in.
Hooray for Mic!
Great catches, Ana. Thanks so much. We are getting to the end now.
Hi Zara, I feel like I might have missed a chapter…. Anyway, here’s some suggestions.
Thanks for the feedback, Connie. This is the chapter following the one you read last. Do you think that is unclear or did you figure out by the third paragraph she’d come back to Jax for her family and gotten captured? I think I might need to move that paragraph up. Zara
Here’s some corrections for CH 8
Here is Chapter 28 of Under the Skin. All comments deeply appreciated. Zara
Thank you, Jenn. I made all those changes. Zara
Please join me in welcoming a new member to our group.
Denise, we’re happy you joined. When you feel comfortable, tell us what genre(s) you write and where you are on your publishing adventure.
Welcome Denise. This is a great critique group. Zara
New Sub by Ana.
Robert settles into life on the Far West freighter.
TIA for your comments and suggestions!
Here are some comments, Anna. Still having trouble with that Enjun nickname. use what is helpful.